Tuesday, May 19, 2009

Tuesday Teaser

Here's a bit of something I'm working on, called The Dental-Phobe:

The hum of the overhead fluorescent lights droned in Alexander's head. His knees shook, and chest was pounding. The hum may have been the thrum from his blood pressure, in reality. His vision was blurred—he couldn't make out the words of the People magazine in his lap. His hair clung to his forehead, drenched in sweat.

“Is this pain really bad enough for this?” He said in a cracked voice.

A startled ten-year-old girl clutched onto her mother, newfound fear in her own eyes.

“Scaring kids, what a loser,” he muttered. “I'm leaving, that's all there is to it.”

So he ran out of the waiting room like the place was on fire, laughing at the thought that his hasty exit probably scared the little girl more than his crazy appearance and absent-minded mutterings. But laughing hurt—bad.

Ten minutes later he plopped down on the red futon in his sparsely furnished bungalow. The pain pills he'd taken had long worn off, but he couldn't will himself into getting up to retrieve more just yet. He was nursing an abscessed molar, and the pain was incredible. It no longer was confined to his jaw—his entire head was a victim to its wrath.


I may post more of this when I have more done, this is the beginning of the umpteenth rewrite of it, so we'll just have to see what happens.


  1. I thought it might be best for me NOT to read this. I have a long, terrifying history with dentists. Let me know if I'm just being a scaredy-cat and it's really not that bad.

    Sorry I haven't been around too much--revisions are almost finished, but work is ramping up. Gonna try and get back to the blog ASAP, though. And after the end of next week, things should calm down enough that I can post more regularly.


  2. The idea is a scary story, but his trauma is more self-inflicted dental surgery, so it might make you actually run TO the dentist. I have a crippling fear of dentists. Give me a surgeon to crack open my chest any day over a dentist! (Been there, done that)

    Thanks!! You get to read any of ABS yet? I have the next three chaps ready and waiting, but I know you're busy.